First Pass Pages for Keep of Ages
My first pass pages came this weekend, and now I’m going over the manuscript once more on paper to write in any last changes. It’s a good way to catch small, subtle things, like if I have too many descriptions of sunlight on one page, or if I use “grim” too frequently. I have to be careful, of course, because if I add a head dipping motion as someone crosses beneath a laundry line, I need to be sure it doesn’t double up a head dipping under a strap of binoculars a page later. One head dipping is cool. Too much of that is clumsy.
I know I’ve said before how much I like The Keep of Ages, but truly I do. Every line feels so right to me, with lively dialogue and thoughtful ponderings of big questions. Rosie is human in such interesting ways, and she makes me think about my own flaws and dreams.